T1+Persuade

04/04/11. Where is your draft Connor? It is really important to leave it on here so that you can see what we conferenced and see the difference in your writing.

__ Monday 04 April __  LI: Learn how to persuade someone through writing.

SC: >
 * Use synonyms
 * Descriptive words e.g adjectives, adverbs, similes and metaphors
 * Strong verbs
 * Imperative speech
 * Rhetorical questions
 * Statistics
 *  Repetition

CHRISTCHURCH MEDICAL

 Do you really want one of New Zealand's most impressive cities to become a ghost town? More than 2000 people are leaving the once great city per day due to medical problems like food poisoning. People are even getting sick from un-hygienic portable toilets, and the people of Christchurch need all the help that we can give them!

 Since the earthquake the amount of medical supplies have dropped severely due to injuries being treated and as a result more supplies are needed. We can help them by sending down supplies from our hospitals such as Tauranga Hospital, Grace Hospital and other hospitals around the Bay of Plenty district.

 The injury rating in Christchurch has been sky high since the earthquake. Hospitals are so full that the Christchurch City Council has needed to erect medical tents all over Christchurch but this does NOT need to happen! More cities in New Zealand should help, other large cities are already helping and it is time for some smaller towns to pitch in to.

 Another issue in Christchurch is the lack of medical resources such as ambulances and hospital staff. The citizens of Christchurch have been forced to use their cars and utes as ambulances, and are having to wait in lines to be seen by doctors. We could help in this situation by getting more South Island towns to send down some un-needed ambulances and extra staff to help these citizens.

 Don't you think that the medical workers have enough on their hands as it is? Come on people now is the time to help Christchurch, because now is the time that they need it most. DO NOT laze around. Get off the couch and do something to help!

 Yours sincerely  Connor Lyttle